1. Old: Last year in my high school child-development class, each student had to take the “Think-It-Over” baby home for a night to get a taste of parenthood.
New: Last year in my boring high school child-development class, each student had to take the dreaded "Think-It-Over" baby home for a long, stressful night, to get a so called "taste of parenthood".
2. Old: The hour-long drive to the restaurant was uneventful. It was rather chilly, so I decided to wrap Tyler in a blanket and carry him in that way.
New: The uneventful and undesirable hour-long drive to the fancy restaurant was uneventful. It was a chilly night and shiny icicles were forming on buildings, so I got out the red striped fleece blanket to tuck Tyler into it to stay warm.
3. Old: Again, during our meal, my friends and I received strange looks from the others in the restaurant. One couple kept walking by our table just to get a look at my baby.
New: During our wonderful meal, again, my friends and I noticed deranged looks coming from the people in the restaurant. One rude couple kept creeping past our table, full of suspicion about the baby.
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